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04-12-2012, 09:57 PM
Hey Guys. Ima 22 year old journalism student. And a huge Steelers fan. My goal is to get paid to cover them someday. haha What could be better?
Well anyway I wrote a bunch of articles on the black and gold and my professor thought it would be a good idea to put them on the web and see what people think. He tells me I'm. good enough to be paid without a degree. haha. Too bad the world doesnt work like that though. haha
Here's an article i wrote on Hines and another on Ben, and if you guys like them, you can easily find more that i wrote, unless your like a moron ratbirds fan or something. Haha
04-12-2012, 10:31 PM
Awesome! Great articles, read them both. Both emphasize the toughness of our players, I like it.
04-13-2012, 09:28 AM
Good work sir. You are hired. Enjoyed reading them both. The Hines Ward article really hit on all the major points that made him so great. Lets see if you can do a draft piece! Cover the first three picks we make in this years draft. Extra credit assignment. I'll call your professor and let him know.
04-13-2012, 09:59 AM
Nice work. You actually write like your much older. Mentioning the line "tough as a $2 Dollar steak" is something I would expect to hear from a much older person. Good work.
Try writing some critical analysis of the Steelers to expand your abilities and the suggestion above about covering the draft will test your research ability and ability to write about things your not quite as familiar with. Good Luck with your writing!
04-14-2012, 08:30 PM
Thanks a lot guys. I appreciate it. If your interested heres a few more that I did. Again lemme know what you think!
THe first is on Heinz Field, and the next about how soft/different the game has become.
04-15-2012, 08:56 PM
Very awesome. I really enjoyed the article about Ben - I've been arguing that he really is an elite QB to fans and critics alike (or in some cases, both in the same person). I'll just have to link them to your analysis!
04-15-2012, 10:06 PM
Hate to be the Debbie Downer, but you really need to work on your grammar and punctuation. While the subject matter and your intentions are good, the short, incomplete sentences made it difficult to read, and you dangled participles all over the place. Keep working, you'll get it! :)
04-15-2012, 10:45 PM
From the linked article:
" I’d like to see your quarterback wreck his motorcycle, going through a windshield in the process, and play a 16 game schedule months later. How many times has your guy had an emergency appendectomy, and played a week later, with flu like symptoms? Peyton Manning hurts his thumb and cries for Jim Sorgi to play. Ben doesn’t know his backups are allowed to play. "
I just cannot imagine him playing healthy for any stretch of time, without injury, without legal issues, and with a solid, consistent O line. For one year, please, for one year. . . . .
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