Great work, Steve!
i just read the 1st 5 pages and was definitely laughing and drawn in. I like the story being told in 1st person. cant wait to read the rest (especially the terry bradshaw part).
nice touch turning the brownfan into a sheep. i bet he feels himself up too.
hopefully you are met with a nice reception here at steelersfever. you came across as very respectful, cognizant of not spamming up the place and genuine in wanting to share your writing with a group of fans who will truly enjoy it.
best of luck!
(you gotta find a way of getting a copy to mr. bradshaw and harris to review while they travel)